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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:52:58 GMT -8
My essay was unnecessarily long, but I thought that it answered the question whether he was redeemed or not mines six pages now. he just told me to keep adding stuff and take other stuff out. Wow, he told me to cut pretty much everything out
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:53:35 GMT -8
He's actually insane...He's different for every person
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Post by ducksball on May 12, 2009 19:54:15 GMT -8
he started off by saying that..then was like yeah go more into depth..weird
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Post by ducksball on May 12, 2009 19:54:34 GMT -8
i know. hes the man tho
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Post by ducksball on May 12, 2009 19:54:49 GMT -8
this isnt relevant..but post count is going up
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:55:36 GMT -8
Ya, I'm at 49 posts...everyone else needs to step up
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:56:02 GMT -8
I thought he was the man at the beginning of the year, now it just pisses me off
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:56:29 GMT -8
he's better than the other teachers though
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:56:56 GMT -8
UGH. I don't want to do any hw tonight
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:57:31 GMT -8
Geometry is a biotch, you had 4.3 the other night didn't you?
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Post by lukeyrid13 on May 12, 2009 19:57:38 GMT -8
Someone said they wouldn't mind editing something earlier...not sure if u were serious... but here is a paragraph. i dont expect anyone to actually edit it..but if someone feels ambitious give a lil feedback? thanks haha. SPOLIER ALERT! Kite Runner With the use of symbols, Hosseini unites Amir’s past with the present. Amir’s past is filled to the brim with horrible, sophomoric , and disgusting actions that he do. And as hard as Amir tries to run away from and forget his past, it is impossible to do so. People can never truly, fully escape their path by running away . because They will always remember it and it will always weigh them down on the inside. Running makes a continual appearance throughout the book and ends up being a key symbol.(I wouldn't come out and say this so matter of fact. It's better to explain then say it directly) Towards the beginning, Amir admits “Hassan ran faster than (he) did” and that “(He) wasn’t just slower than Hassan but clumsier too” (53). Amir had “always envied his natural athleticism” (53). After many horrible events take place and a rift forms between Amir and Hassan, Amir learns for the first time that running away from problems does not relieve the pain. Every time Amir tries to escape the pain, the guilt always catches up to him. Until after his foreboding quest, he will never be able to move on with a happy life. Not until all the events in Afghanistan and the Middle East take place and Sohrab lives with Amir and Soraya in San Francisco can Amir happily run without any sense of remorse. After seeing Sohrab smile for the first time in months, Amir “ran with the wind blowing in (his) face, and a smile as wide as the Valley of Panjsher on (his) lips” (371). Running, literally or figuratively, occurs numerous times throughout the book. By threading the act of running into book from beginning to end, Hosseini intentionally makes the reader notice how running turns from a bad thing , in the beginning, to a good thing , at the very end. By using Symbols that change from bad to good, the reader naturally feels Amir, as well, makes the change from bad to good. The act of sticking money under the poor man’s mattress shows Amir’s growth from his childhood. As a child, in order to make his father mad and shame Hassan, Amir frames Hassan for stealing money and a watch, thus making Ali and Hassan so full of shame that they leave. Upon returning to Afghanistan and staying with a poor Afghan family, Amir gives the children his watch and leaves money under their mattress for treating him so well and feeding him. The act of framing Hassan haunts Amir his whole life, and by turning his guilt into something positive for someone else, he relives himself of his misery. Amir’s redemption stems from changing the negative memories from his childhood that haunt his mind into positive events that affect other’s lives for the better. Hosseini links Amir’s past and present by using symbols that appear once in a bad light, and once in a good light. This is from the Kite Runner. I fixed some but watching American Idol with the wife and watching the 1 year old run around I kinda lost interest. Overall though I think you put in some extra coma's and I wouldn't necessarily say phrases like key symbols and I think I crossed out like 2 sentences that were poorly worded. Sorry I didn't give it full attention
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Post by ducksball on May 12, 2009 19:57:49 GMT -8
I know..tulsee said she'd edit my essay this time! cause E wont do it anymore. haha
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Post by tmaczdaddy(dd10snoop28) on May 12, 2009 19:57:58 GMT -8
woo
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Post by ducksball on May 12, 2009 19:58:23 GMT -8
Someone said they wouldn't mind editing something earlier...not sure if u were serious... but here is a paragraph. i dont expect anyone to actually edit it..but if someone feels ambitious give a lil feedback? thanks haha. SPOLIER ALERT! Kite Runner With the use of symbols, Hosseini unites Amir’s past with the present. Amir’s past is filled to the brim with horrible, sophomoric , and disgusting actions that he do. And as hard as Amir tries to run away from and forget his past, it is impossible to do so. People can never truly, fully escape their path by running away . because They will always remember it and it will always weigh them down on the inside. Running makes a continual appearance throughout the book and ends up being a key symbol.(I wouldn't come out and say this so matter of fact. It's better to explain then say it directly) Towards the beginning, Amir admits “Hassan ran faster than (he) did” and that “(He) wasn’t just slower than Hassan but clumsier too” (53). Amir had “always envied his natural athleticism” (53). After many horrible events take place and a rift forms between Amir and Hassan, Amir learns for the first time that running away from problems does not relieve the pain. Every time Amir tries to escape the pain, the guilt always catches up to him. Until after his foreboding quest, he will never be able to move on with a happy life. Not until all the events in Afghanistan and the Middle East take place and Sohrab lives with Amir and Soraya in San Francisco can Amir happily run without any sense of remorse. After seeing Sohrab smile for the first time in months, Amir “ran with the wind blowing in (his) face, and a smile as wide as the Valley of Panjsher on (his) lips” (371). Running, literally or figuratively, occurs numerous times throughout the book. By threading the act of running into book from beginning to end, Hosseini intentionally makes the reader notice how running turns from a bad thing , in the beginning, to a good thing , at the very end. By using Symbols that change from bad to good, the reader naturally feels Amir, as well, makes the change from bad to good. The act of sticking money under the poor man’s mattress shows Amir’s growth from his childhood. As a child, in order to make his father mad and shame Hassan, Amir frames Hassan for stealing money and a watch, thus making Ali and Hassan so full of shame that they leave. Upon returning to Afghanistan and staying with a poor Afghan family, Amir gives the children his watch and leaves money under their mattress for treating him so well and feeding him. The act of framing Hassan haunts Amir his whole life, and by turning his guilt into something positive for someone else, he relives himself of his misery. Amir’s redemption stems from changing the negative memories from his childhood that haunt his mind into positive events that affect other’s lives for the better. Hosseini links Amir’s past and present by using symbols that appear once in a bad light, and once in a good light. This is from the Kite Runner. I fixed some but watching American Idol with the wife and watching the 1 year old run around I kinda lost interest. Overall though I think you put in some extra coma's and I wouldn't necessarily say phrases like key symbols and I think I crossed out like 2 sentences that were poorly worded. Sorry I didn't give it full attention Thanks for the effort those helped!
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Post by gregspechtismyhero on May 12, 2009 19:58:48 GMT -8
haha why won't she?
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